Yes, my tryst with experimentation continues. I've decided to try out a new form of poetry every month. This time, I've tried my hand at Kyrielle(French) Sonnet.
A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet.This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:
AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.
Splendid floral stems, fresh in vase,
Unified vibrant visual treat.
Beautiful smiling; close they stood,
Relieved from tones of racism.
Feathers various; flocked up so close,
On wondrous flying albatross.
Warm calico; on her adorned,
Relieved from tones of racism.
White or black, or deep brownie hues,
Moulded us God, of the same clay.
Harmonious dwell; let’s today,
Relieved from tones of racism.
Splendid floral stems, fresh in vase,
Relieved from tones of racism.
9 comments:
im zapped !!
What a stong poem written so tenderly with the use of flowers
A strong point made
Lovely Lovely
Wandering gypsy :)
The way you compared a bunch of flowers and then human race... and brought out the similarity was very good...
well i must admit, its nice to see people studying the various structures that form a poetry, nice to see all the efforts. thanx for explaining us and shedding light. good to see such talent.
lovely wandering gypsy..the new form,the comparisons..everything about this poem is lovely..
my favorite lines are
White or black, or deep brownie hues,
Moulded us God, of the same clay.
Sensitive write!
Wandering gypsy, This one is a masterpiece. And thanks for the elucidation of french poetry.A learning experience for novices such as me...
Fantastic.... Am speechless...at the beauty of the piece..
the layers, from nature, to colours, to finally the race that created racism..!
And as usual, a Master's touch in the form, its explanation, and its execution....
Am glad i got to read a form like this, and a theme like this...from u Wandering Gypsy...
Full marks!! Take a bow!!
I love this sonnet, it is lovely, and as Arpita pointed out, a strong theme and message yet delivered tenderly.
I read your whole page and was extremely impressed. You are very talented and deeply sensitive.
It was a pleasure to meet you in words. Sorry its taken me so long to arrive here. I have so many sites to keep track of it seems I am rarely here on this one.
Thanks for stopping by my page and leaving a comment so I could read yours.
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